Thanks for your feedback, 80ktsClamp. It would help a lot if you could be a little more specific. Which are the sections you find "horribly written" and why? What do you find objectionable? The style, the diction, or something else? The book's Flesch Reading Ease index is 52 and the Flesch-Kincaid Level (developed by J. P. Kincaid for the U.S. Navy and became the DD military standard) is 10. I believe these numbers are generally in line with the targeted readership's expectations, but I admit, they might not fill everyone's needs. How would you write the sections you object to? I'd appreciate any constructive criticism and suggestions.